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A Rhyming Run: Introduction by cocoaferret A Rhyming Run: Introduction by cocoaferret
Jeez.

Writing this stuff’s like eating limes.
And despite what you say, I’m updating in rhymes!

(But don’t worry, I’ll reply like a normal person
…Unless this habit decides to worsen)

And is that font too hard to read?
If not, I think I'll just proceed:

So This is just the introduction!
Part 1 is still quite under construction ^^;

But have no fear!
The future is clear!
I do believe its time is near!
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:iconyavaho155:
YaVaho155 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Student Digital Artist
I prefer Poe :p
No seriously, never EVER compare poetry to teens again will ya? :p
It might offend people who actually spend time doing it ;)
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Student General Artist
Oh my, there's no comparing here! I'm saying Poetry ISN'T dreary things me and some of my fellow teens shoddily put together! It's an art form that takes time and effort, and there are many different kinds that need to be appreciated!

I'm just saying I shouldn't be taken seriously; I am NOT a real poet, and I could NEVER be as great as Dickinson or Frost or Poe.

I do better at funny and silly and childish ^^;
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:iconyavaho155:
YaVaho155 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011  Student Digital Artist
I see, my bad for understanding ^^
my apologies.

And off to F@#!ing code again <.<
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MorganZephyr999 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
why do you write in verse
every time you converse
within this tiny literature piece
and shall continue until til heavens mince meat
oh god its horrible trying to rhyme
and now you've dragged me into it this time
But do the casualocke, ol cocoaferret
now is the time to try one alone
i dont exactly know what that last one means
boy, i need a nice rest at home
so a soul silver one i heard
can i name at least a bird
if its a hoothoot that crows
name it Tick, which shows
that you really have lots to learn
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ShadeofShinon Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This was such a lovely introduction! You're really good at writing poems, they're so nice to read and they tell the reader so much in just a couple of verses. Oh, and those little pictures you draw in each part are so lovely, this run could as well be and illustrated poem book. <3
I'll be following this! :>
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2011  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! While I'm really only capable of writing silly poems, I'm glad it's turned out well!

Haha, It's such an easy little project, I hope I'll carry on with it! XD
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:iconshadeofshinon:
ShadeofShinon Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem at all!
I hope so, too! It'd be really nice to see how this continues. :>
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AoiSora19S Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2011
._. rhyming. rhyming everywhere
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:iconkodachichan:
kodachichan Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011
Wow, I'm so impressed. I'm completely useless at rhyming myself, so it's really cool to see someone who isn't. You should be proud of this ability!
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Student General Artist
Ahhhh, thank you!

I may not be a master of it, but I do love funny, quirky poems! XD
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:iconkodachichan:
kodachichan Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2011
Wow, I'm so impressed. I'm completely useless at rhyming myself, so it's really cool to see someone who isn't. You should be proud of this ability!
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:iconchihuahuazz:
Chihuahuazz Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011
This is catchy. Too catchy
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Student General Artist
;w;
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Epileptic-Trees Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011
I'd say you're crazy,
but I'm too lazy
to leave a proper comment.

If I tried this,
It'd be swing-and-a-miss
and make me need to vomit.
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flareblitz Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, pray forgive, I forgot to say
That the font you've used just makes my day!

The dots above the "i"s -- the parentheses!
The way the "f"s reach below their x-axes!

More work, though, must go into the question mark;
It's head halts too suddenly -- the contrast too stark.
Observe this fine specimen, though the most commonly seen:
I am partial to how it bends -- know what I mean?

And yet -- how amazing, how beautiful, how true!
I want this font, I really do!

<33
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flareblitz Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I know what you mean; I quite do
I just can't help myself, it's true:
There was this time, in my despair,
I said to the gods a little prayer
That my mid-year exams would leave alive
Me, when I thought to take a dive
Off the deep end of the pool
Of all the things I'd learnt in school
In pursuit of the unknown -- the unlearned --
The answers after which I yearned
In the terrifying battle in the hall
Where I must sit, proud and tall
And put my pencil to my answer script --
And with words or diagrams I'd ripped
Wholesale from my various notes
Explain my pro- and eukaryotes,
Or: how differs from its counterpart
The sickle cells in an afflicted heart?
And even then this is understandable
Except for one fact: The "Hobotable",
That is to say, my fellow friends
Those who fought with me, and met their ends
On possibly June twenty-two --
Were the very deities I prayed to!

Rhyme really takes over, as you can see,
My life, my thoughts! -- thus, Q. E. D.
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Chro-fee Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
Yes, YES :iconiloveitplz:
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Student General Artist
:heart:
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:icondaughterofbastet:
daughterofbastet Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
AAAAAAAAAAAAAH you rhymed "honesty" with "formality"!! * sob* MAKE IT STOP!!
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Student General Artist
I'm sorry ;_;
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:icondaughterofbastet:
daughterofbastet Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
It's okay... :pat: I guess I overreacted ^^;
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Student General Artist
..... Is that a bad thing? ;A;

So much slant rhyming.

SO.
MUCH.

;w;
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:icondaughterofbastet:
daughterofbastet Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
Also, I would recommend you work on the meter, in order to have the same number of beats per line, even if you aren't using some form of iambic (which is seriously overrated). :B I'm... guessing a lot of people won't notice or care if you have one syllable out of place. Or if you use sight rhymes or slant rhymes. ^^; Which reminds me--have you noticed that English is one of the few languages (since at least Chaucer's time) to insist on rhyming? :nerd: The old epics, like Beowulf and the Iliad, don't bother with it. The Celtic and Germanic groups especially seemed to favor alliteration, which kind of makes sense, since, of the various Indo-European language and culture groups, those two are apparently the most closely related. :blahblah: As for poetic format, have you considered the limerick, or the various types of sonnets? It's just, I've always found it much easier to use an ABAB pattern, rather than AABB, and I was wondering what comes most naturally to you.

TL;DR: What do you mean, you didn't read my massive and highly technical wall of text?! :paranoid:
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Student General Artist
I use a very (and I mean very) lackadaisical form of... Anapestic tetrameter? It's a meter somewhat similar to Dr. Suess's children's books! But I'd hate to get too technical about it. I don't like to depend on sight rhymes or slant rhymes (I HATE SIGHT RHYMES. SO MUCH). But then again, I can't call myself a poet. I'm just some girl :E

Though they're called epic 'poems', 'poem' matters the most in terms of rhythm, meter, metaphors and such of the like. A more sing-song sort of storytelling? Rhyming isn't always a part of it! But yes, the English language is QUITE guilty of needing to rhyme.

If a poem doesn't rhyme, it's more often than not simply overlooked as prose :P

I don't know. both 'ABAB' and 'AABB' are relatively natural for me. I just throw them both together and hope for the best!

I do, however, realize that there's quite a lack of good rhythm in this one. Regardless of how casual this is supposed to be, meter is all too important! So I'm keeping that in mind for the next one. ^^;
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daughterofbastet Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
Don't be so down on yourself! :hug: Until he became famous, Shakespeare was "just some guy". Same with da Vinci and Marilyn Monroe (okay, not the best examples...). :D With all these watchers and messages, you must know you're a great artist and a very nice person. :nod: And I'm really touched you took the time to read my whole comment ^^;

Yes, it does sound very sing-song like! :eager: Have you ever heard Celtic poems chanted? It's so... I don't know how to say it! But even if you don't speak Celtic (like me :p), you can feel the rhythm of the waves and the clash of swords just in the way it's said :innocent:

Gah, you're right about "free verse" and other non-rhyming poetry being looked down on. :paranoid: Yes, meter is your frieeeend. :lmao: Thank you so much for listening to my babble--uh, suggestions--and I'm really looking forward to see where you take this! :glomp:
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:iconumbrielle:
Umbrielle Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Student
OH BOY
WHAT JOY
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2011  Student General Artist
ANOTHER GAME I CAN DESTROY!
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:iconzooky:
Zooky Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
SO MUCH RHYME.
but it's good rhyme.
I read it like poetry so it's all good.
(I don't make sense. no worries.)
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Student General Artist
OKAY. I DID OKAY ;w;
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:iconzooky:
Zooky Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011
YOU DID MORE THAN OKAY.
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LayneMuffins Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
I'd like to say: Lol
but don't worry, it went just swell
Oh, Great. You got me in the rhyming mood
Man I hope that this ends soon.
But before I blabber too much, let me tell you....
That I can't wait for this run, and oh Alexial's too.
Don't think I'm pushy, there's no pressure there.
You've only got tons of fans. And of fans I am scared,
(so I wonder how YOU fare.)

Can't wait to see where this run goes.
I've never seen a rhyming run, I hope you know.
Well this is Layne Muffins, (who's poem did suck)
Wishing you, the very best of luck.
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xSugarxFairyx Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
XD I found this so entertaining.
( probably because I can't rhyme worth my life )
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Student General Artist
PFFFF thank you dear~
Oh man, I love rhyming. I... find it hard to write seriously without it turning ridiculous and rhyming XD
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falsehero7 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
As a poet and a writer I am very much looking forward to this! :)
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Shaakku Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, rhymes! This reminds me of childhood, I just loved rhymes and still love, though I can't do very creative ones myself but doesn't matter~ And this nuzlocke is good change!

... a-and I love your Emerald Nuzlocke too and your art and all oh gosh I'm too shy to comment sometimes YOU'RE COOL AND KEEP UP DOING GOOD WORK!!
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:iconcocoaferret:
cocoaferret Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Student General Artist
Yaaay! I love rhymes so much too~ My favorite are the funny quirky kinds that can give a good laugh~ Hopefully I'll be able to do that! XD

Aaaah, thank you so much! ;w; It's alright, I always try to reply to everyone! ^^
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Jamie2286 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Dear god woman, i love your mad rhyming skills.

Because they are mad.
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CoeurEtAme568 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist
Your rhyming skillz.
They amaze me.
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PokeNOMNOMNOM Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Heh.
Well done, I enjoyed reading it. ^^
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Mla-wolf Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're a genius for even ATTEMPTING to make rhymes. Seriously. Dx

But this is still totally awesome. :D
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:iconneroluna:
NeroLuna Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
Nice rhymes, better than mine. :)
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sparx364 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, this should be fun,
this rhyming run!
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SaturnCheese Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, so much rhyming. I'm eager to see how this will turn out C:
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:iconcardboardlawyer:
CardboardLawyer Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
Ah man, you should have saved this idea for a Fire Red run.

Rhyming Red~
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LackadaisicalLeopah Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh no, Cocoa's turning into a rhyming machine! :iconomfgplz:

NUUUUUU YOU MUST NOT SUBJECT!

But I really do love the rhyme. ;D
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:icond-hatcher:
D-Hatcher Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
And now I look forward to another of your runs.
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Lucca-Majere Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
LOL. Made me smile. XD
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:iconmirminay:
Mirminay Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh that's totally fine, I sometimes rhyme during conversations with older people. But I won't do that in english. /D;;
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Wonksbrother Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
I can't wait to read this and imagine saying it in an 80's hip hop style :D
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GameDragon64 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2011
The font looks just fine, it's easily legible.
Despite your self-criticism, the rhymes are incredible.

Oh dear, I think my last rhyme there was forced.
Never mind, this is awesome, your effort's not lost.

(Damnit, that last one was forced too).
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